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link 10.03.2007 13:59 |
Subject: помогите, запуталась помогите мне это перевести, плизПроведены предварительные переговоры с Госгортехнадзором по согласованию операционных стандартов с целью их легализации и увеличения их весомости для подрядчиков, чтобы в дальнейшем включить их в опросный лист подрядчика. вот как я с этим боролась |
Preliminary negotiations WERE (have been?) carried out with... in order to coordinate operating standards... |
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link 10.03.2007 14:36 |
безличное предложение фтопку (оно и в русском навевает грустные мысли) разбейте предложение на два, дабы сделать его читабельным и фсе что-нибудь типа: в дальнейшем - глагола в будущем времени достаточно |
Preliminary discussions were held with GosGorTechNadzor (Federal Committee for Mining and Industrial Supervision State Committee for Supervision of Safe Working Practices) to reach agreement regarding operating standards to ensure that they are given status of statutory requirements, alert Contractor to their importance and pave the way for subsequent inclusion/incorporation into the future Contractor Questionnaire. |
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link 10.03.2007 17:41 |
делать мне нечего поэтому поспорю "to reach agreement regarding operating standards" "alert Contractor to their importance" = make the Contractor notice that they are important or dangerous reach agreement on them to ensure that they "pave the way for" = ужас "to ensure that they are are given, alert and pave" = stylistically lamentable. either the passive or active voice. "subsequent inclusion/incorporation into the future Contractor Questionnaire" - subsequent and future = something is redundant and finally, the entire sentence is clumsy. do they need common/uniform standards to give them some official status, impress contractors or include them in questionnaires? you have to make a decision and write it in concise and clear English if your piece of text is informative |
Preliminary discussions were held with GosGorTechNadzor [GGTN] (Federal Committee for Mining and Industrial Supervision) to reach agreement regarding operating standards to ensure that they are official status [of statutory requirements], [thus] alerting Contractor to their importance/raising Contractor awareness of to their importance and paving the way /setting the scene/preparing the ground for subsequent inclusion/incorporation into the future Contractor Questionnaire. Все остальное нормально. "to reach agreement regarding operating standards" |
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link 10.03.2007 22:57 |
re:"Все остальное нормально." Побойтесь Бога, коллега |
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