It was a summer day in south France. Crowds of people - French, Italians, Arabs, and hundreds of other tourists gathered together on rocky beaches waiting for something.
Pressmen buzzed around taking snapshots of the crowd beaten by midday sun.
People spoke to each other, beheld the sea lipping softly the pebbles.
Drink and snack vendors fortasted a considerable increase in their earnings this day.
Suddenly the sea darkened and a fresh breeze caressed the jaded bodies. The sunlight began to fail. People took off strange devices that looked like futuristic eye-glasses.
Some took off shivers of glass covered with lampblack, but policemen handled them the same devices that the others had.
It was the time. All eyes turned to the sky [through these funky devices] where something black was slowly engluting the sun.
It was the day when a total solar eclipse plunged into the darkness a large part of Europe.
Everybody stood quiet enchanted by the magnificent performance of nature.
Minutes were passing by but nobody thought about leaving the place.
In the same way, many centuries ago, battles stopped and everybody looked at the sky in reverend awe.
Little by little, the daylight was going back, the moon following its way towards the west.
People were shaking off the entrancement of the moment, didn't look at each other. Some were sipping the beer, others were musing upon a distant scene. Some turned again to their activities.
But from thenceforth none of them were the same as before.

(завтра могу указать, какие именно слова ей не приглянулись; сейчас просто с собой исправленного текста нету)

Вспомнила замечание англичанки про слово englute :))) Она пересмотрела все доступные ей словари и опросила всех присутствующих англичан-преподов и не нашла это слово :)))
Я была уверена, что взяла его из словаря, но сейчас смотрю - нету! Вот так вот на подсознательном уровне французский вылазит :)))

caressed the jaded bodies => touched the relaxed bodies
Ну, чего-то совсем нейтральное предложение получается :(

про sunlight не говорят fail
А что говорят?

непонятно, почему People took off strange devices - они их должны надеть по логике
Имелось ввиду достать, а потом надеть.

Q ** непонятно, почему People took off strange devices - они их должны надеть по логике - Имелось ввиду достать, а потом надеть.
A ** People reached for [some] strange devices [and put them on]