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 Абориген

link 23.02.2011 9:05 
Subject: отрывок из сопроводительного письма
Здравствуйте уважаемые форумчане! Я пишу сопроводительно письмо, хотелось бы узнать ваше мнение касательно данного абзаца. Все ли грамматически и стилистически тут верно, если не затруднит посоветуйте пожалуйста где что подправить. Заранее признателен!

It should be noted for fairness’ sake that International Public Law, which I studied, may seem to be irrelevant and inapplicable in the field of Oil and Gas Industry. However, as you might know, LLM is all about self-studying, and I can promise that I will do my best to adapt to and learn any field of International Law you will require of me.

 silly.wizard

link 23.02.2011 9:26 
looks OK to me - up until this point:
"to adapt to and learn any field of International Law you will require of me. "
questionable:
1. "to adapt to ... any field" -- not sure if one can adapt to a field. what do you mean?
2. "any field ... you will require of me. " -- they cannot require a field. they might require knowledge. right?

note, i am not a guru - can only raise questions, humbly.

 Абориген

link 23.02.2011 9:44 
Hello, thanks anyway. Well, what I actually meant under the 'field' of International Law (IL) is Corporate IL, International Investment Law, and so on. These are the fields of IL, aren't they?

 silly.wizard

link 23.02.2011 10:01 
now, on to semantics:

3. i do not think this works well: "it should be noted ... that IPL ... may seem to be irrelevant."
it is not what you want noted. you want "noted" NOT ONLY the [seeming] irrelevance, but ALSO your willingness to work to overcome the shortcoming. right??
if so, i would either combine this statement together with the next one OR split the first part into a separate statement (e.g. "There is one issue that should be noted.") - that way it could serve an introduction to the entire paragraph, as opposed to just the "seeming irrelevance" claim.

4. "IPL may seem irrelevant. However, I will do my best to learn" - these two do not mesh in my view:
If you promise to resolve the "irrelevance" issue with your effort, then you must agree with the issue - then drop the "may seem" part!

 silly.wizard

link 23.02.2011 10:31 
imho:
There is one issue that should be noted. The focus of my studies was International Public Law. Thus, my skills may not be immediately applicable to the field of Oil and Gas Industry. Being aware of that, I want to assure you that I am willing and capable to extend my knowledge into this or any other field of International Law that would be required of me. After all, for me the LLM has always been about self-studying.

not meant to be perfect, just to illustrate what i consider appropriate:
the constant push, less time for negatives, less doubt, and the pace ;)

 Абориген

link 23.02.2011 12:05 
thank you very much indeed Mr Silly Wizard. I do appreciate that!

 sledopyt

link 23.02.2011 18:14 
It should be noted for fairness’ sake that International Public Law, which I studied, may seem to be irrelevant and inapplicable in the field of Oil and Gas Industry. However, as you might know, LLM is all about self-studying, and I can promise that I will do my best to adapt to and learn any field of International Law you will require of me.

consider:

My degree in International Public Law may not seem to be directly relevant or applicable to the oil and gas industry practices, but I am confident that the thorough knowledge of various legal issues that I acquired and the top-notch learning skills that I developed during the years of earning my LLP degree will be indispensable in successfully tackling any new learning challenges or meeting the company objectives set out for my role.

 Абориген

link 3.03.2011 13:40 
@Sledopyt:

Thank you very much indeed!!!

 

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